If my toys came to life when I was asleep.
There would be a big fight between them, because I have a lot of avengers toys and a lot of star wars toys. It would be the fight of the century, marvel and star wars. They might tie me up because they always fall off my shelf.
They would probably start traveling, the star wars toys would probably go on a space trip. And Marvel toys would go fight bad toys like Kyloh Ren.
In this fight I think marvel would start off losing because star wars have the force and lightsabers and laser guns. Then marvel gets the come back, captain america throws his shield into kyloh ren's helmet and it makes a loud clatter. When that happens I wake up as the toys fall to the ground like in toy story. I think they all just fell off the shelf and put them back in position. My cat was there sitting in the corner of the room staring at the toys with a close watch on them. I fell asleep again quickly the toys make sure I was asleep. The toys don't see my cat there and keep fight in. then my cat pounces on the toys knocking some out and he brings some to his bed. And the toys never fought again
Hi George,
ReplyDeleteWhat a great imagination. I like where this was going, as I am a Science Faction Fantasy Fan, so I know all the characters you were using. I can see your story totally happening.
From a readers point of view it would be good if you remember that names start with a capital letters and make sure that every sentence makes sense.
From a Fantasy Fan A+.
Kia ora George,
ReplyDeleteYou have great ideas here - I do wonder if Marvel Universe went against Star Wars Universe, who will win?
I really like how you have used paragraphs and some interesting vocabulary - clatter and pounce. I wonder if you can use the thesaurus to find more interesting words.
Looking forward to your future blog posts,
Miss Laxa
FROM MRS A @ NWS
ReplyDeleteMalo e lelei George
You have written a great imaginative story George. I noticed you used paragraphs and used some good descriptive phrases like "loud clatter" and "cat pounces". I also liked how your story ended with what the cat did.
I wonder if you could use capital letters for the names of your characters in your future blogs, for example: Marvel, Star Wars, Kyon Ren.
I look forward to reading our next blog.
From Mrs A
Nice story
ReplyDeleteNice story very interesting liked it :)
ReplyDeleteWow! seems like a interesting scene to me, I would be horned if my toys came to life, it would be like watching a movie but it's real! I also wonder if it did really happen, would the toys break? What would you feel seeing your toys come to life? Anxious? Scared? Happy?
ReplyDeletethat was really interesting and how you did all of this
ReplyDeletehi george,
ReplyDeleteI really like your story it's also funny.
Great blog
Hey George!!
ReplyDeleteGood job with your story! I like that you have used paragraphs.. I also liked that you wrote it in a way that I could picture it! I saw Marvel losing and then that dramatic come back!
Wow.. how cool would it have been if you could imagine what the cat was thinking! Or if the cat was part of it and someone jumped on its back and used it as a weapon!
Well done!